For those wanting serious critiques only!!
Published on October 23, 2010 By teddybearcholla In Wallpapers

 Thought I would start this thread in the hopes that there will be good and serious critiques.   I can be your first *victim* IR  or whomever wishes to give me direction!!!    This is in progress....it is a photo I took and then added the little ghosties...which may or may not work. 

 


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on Nov 03, 2010

MUCH better, Frankie!   Maybe cast a faint shadow of the hawk on the water.  I agree with the Xiandi, that the clouds need work.  Could you bring in a cloudy sky stock photo rather than render clouds?

on Nov 03, 2010

I was trying to keep it stock free if I could. I have done some clouds, now tell me what you all think. Jafo, you are a hard man to please! I will revisit the grass tomorrow. ( and maybe the clouds too!)

on Nov 03, 2010

Maybe cast a faint shadow of the hawk on the water
To me, it looks like the hawk is just above the edge of the water and the land, therefore you would not be able to see his shadow...besides, it kinda hazy and that would filter the light, making the shadow pretty much invisible.

The clouds do look much better now, much more depth to them. IMO, I think the part of the clouds that is kind of peach color should be desaturated a tiny bit as it gets closer to the water, the sunlight would fade a bit there because it has to go through the fog. The peach up high is great.

The improvement from the original is quite dramatic now.

on Nov 03, 2010

Well, thank you for that. It was headed for the recycle bin but perserverence won out.I did add that tiny bit of reflection under the hawk and thought a shadow would be overkill.  Not quite sure how to desaturate part of that layer and not the rest. It's late and I'm tired! I'll leave it go til tomorrow and see if I can change up the grass a bit.

on Nov 03, 2010

Xiandi

To me, it looks like the hawk is just above the edge of the water and the land, therefore you would not be able to see his shadow...

I guess you're right.  I need new computer glasses.

The improvement from the original is quite dramatic now.

I agree.

on Nov 03, 2010

Perspective reads there will be no reflection of the hawk....

 

If you "must" use a brush for your grass....[the blobby ones]....post-edit by altering them so they do not appear identical/repeated.

on Nov 03, 2010

Big improvement, Frankie!

on Nov 04, 2010

I've done a bit more refining and tried to change up the grass. I guess the tuts I read on doing grass were all wrong, Can someone suggest a good site for Photoshop tutorials? I know there are scads of them but which do you think is the best or that you would use?

on Nov 04, 2010

frankie, i would be moving the trees from the eges, they keep drawing the eyes to the edges of the wallpaper and not to the centre.

my eye direction goes in this order,  tree, edge. bird, tree, edge, water, tree, edge.

sounds stupid i know.... but your main aim is to have the audience attention on what you want them to look at most, in other words, what is your focal point? and make the surrounding images force the eyes to centre on it. xxxxx

if your bird is the focal point, you need to truly change the trees, they are too dominant..

 faint mountains on the other side of the river would aid as an arrow towards the bird (why as an arrow? because a mountains goes straight up

and so will the eyes)

on Nov 04, 2010

i would also be adding light to the trees, bird, grass ect from where the light is coming from, this will give it more depth and more oomph.

on Nov 04, 2010

Still like the 'Where's Wally' game....where's the cloned grass.

Once you see them they stand out like festering warts....

on Nov 04, 2010

I did not clone anything in the image. I removed all of the grass I did with the scatter brush and replaced with individual grass brushes, each of them different. The foreground plants are masked in from an actual photo and appear as they do in the photo. I guess I don't follow what you are referring to.

on Nov 04, 2010

IMO not specifically grass, but the flat flower looking things. One can assess they were either brushes or copy pastes of the same image just size,hue and angles changed.

Also the bird looks out of place has no depth to it. Try adding a larger transparency to the edges of the wings and a slightly smaller one to the body, as the feathers are generally thin around the edges and seem almost semi transparent in flight when the light source is behind the subject. it also could use a slight bit more texture as it looks washed out or "Flat" if you will. If your resizing it try using lanczos3 interpolation to keep as much of the texture as possible.

Tip#1." For everyone not specifically you" When you resize a item always resize from the original source, as then you will always get the best quality. Resizing from a resized image leads to loss of depth and textures generally.

The dead looking sapling far left bottom, it's got a crisp focus while the surroundings are slightly blurred, it looks "planted". Same as the sticks far right sticking out around the tree trunk, too sharp to fit the rest of the scene.

 

The center of the sky under the bird is slightly distorted "semi pixelized", try softening it.

 

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on Nov 04, 2010

 

Quite self-evident.

The foreground doesn't have sufficient 'depth'.... still gives the impression of being more a hedge than a field. and there probably needs to be more visible cues to equate the foreground with the 'horizon' view-point.   The third dimension is still vague. [but getting better].

on Nov 04, 2010

i did a short mockup editing the bird to show how a bit of texture and transparency can make it seem more realistic.

 

 

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